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Old 8th Apr 2010, 23:41
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Fretus Pennae
 
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Proper English Indeed!

Dear Air Police

In the interest of advancing the collective linguistic and communicative ability of those reading this thread, I respectfully submit the following grammatical and language analysis of your post:

Sentence 1:- incorrect punctuation; the line should end with a colon not a full stop (you are making a suggestion, which follows).

Sentence 4:- 'Doctors' does not require an apostrophe (it is simply a plural). Stylistically, I would also suggest starting with 'Your lack of ability...', which then makes it clear who will have to clear those higher hurdles.

And finally, Sentence 5 flows somewhat clumsily for my liking - to improve it, I would omit the nugatory 'to be'.

I am confident that you will recognize this peer review and critical exposure as impersonal and academic in intent, and will support it, for the illumination and improvement of all.

I remain, sir, your most humble pedant,
F. P.
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