Is this genuine?
I've got as far as p4, and noticed reference to "the First World War". Would the participants in WWII be aware that they were fighting a World War, and have named it so? Surely you can only have a "first" if you have a "second", otherwise you've got an "only" (if that makes sense?).
If you were writing after-the-event, when it was clear you had 2 World Wars, you would use the phrases first and second. If the book was written during WWII, wouldn't the war of 14-18 be refered to as "The Great War"?
Of should I go and have a cup of tea and try not to think so hard?
Blunty