Acm, You are right about the pensions...it sucks. BUT, the rest looks all fine to me. The loyalty bonus should be added to basic though, I agree with that.
I have to disagree with your statement about this deal being the same as the previous one. I will gain significantly more than 510 pounds per year on this new deal. Would you care to show us your calculations? Perhaps I've overlooked something on mine. Are you a F/O? TRSS? how many years in company?