Alex
Don't us Chinagraph, they are too thick and rub off, try a fine spirit based marker pen!
Stapelford approach control, piper XXXX 10 miles south at 3000' request transition northbound to Mellonville.
Stapleford is A/G so the call-sign is Stapleford Radio, they do not have any ability to Control! "Transition" refers to a LEVEL an ALTITUDE and a LAYER, we as pilots do not "transition" unles its another name for Bimble! (Bimble - to aimlessly go - allez sans precision)
If you are flying with an instructor, then why are you not asking him rather than people on here? The instructor's job is to teach you how to do it.